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The 4 pillars of life: shelter, food, drink, and the Sun. Strange isn't it that we need these very bare basics to survive, and yet we can play God and add another pillar to survival of which changes everything completely. We have added money, if one does not have finances one simply cannot live, just as we can't without the original 4 pillars.
We as humans have done something quite horrific, we have capitalised survival, we have made it so that those who cannot afford to live, simply perish- yes there are organisations to help people with no money, but they simply cannot do what is needed- what is ultimately something for we as a race to do, disregard our own creation- money. Disregard is not too strong a word, nor is destroy, annihilate or eradicate- money should not be a fundamental of our lives, and yet it is.

We have determined in our infinite wisdom that in equal should be our very way of life, those with more of a means of survival, do just that, survive better- look at our society, you have to pay to be healed, to be feed, to drink and to have shelter. The only thing we do not have to pay for is our use of the Sun, but lets be brutally honest with ourselves, if we could capitalise the Sun we most definitely would, and why? What makes you any different from your fellow humans- you are both of similar DNA, both of the same species, both of the same basic biological design. We are equal in almost every aspect of life, granted some can run faster, some are better with numbers- but they are our individual traits that makes us who we are, and at the end of the day, we all have our own talents, meaning we too are equal in that sense- even in our inequalities, we are equal- because we all have them. So why must we make the right to survive any different? Everyone is entitled to survival, no one is immune from that, so why should we capitalise it and make life so fundamentally in equal because of our own creation- money.

It is because some of our race our greedy- well we all are in some way, but others are greedy at the expense of others, and that just isn't our way, being equal in the basics of our biology why should others judge themselves superior to the rest because they have more money? I mean what is money- pieces of paper, metal or digital information- it truly amazing how many forms it takes, but ultimately money is just a means of gaining what you wish or in fact need- like food, drink and shelter. Money is just another bargaining tool, to which mankind has had millions- rocks, animals even food such as potatoes, money is simply our version of 21st century potatoes, the only exception is money isn't as healthy for us as potatoes are.

We have built a world on the acquisition of ultimately pointless materials- when it comes to the universe as a whole it doesn't matter who has the most money, it matters what you achieve in history, and quite frankly one must really live long enough to get more than a word in history. You are much more likely to live longer with a stack of potatoes as opposed to a stack of money, yes you can swap your money for services rendered, but that isn't what people do, some people hold money in stacks up on stacks, holding it for no real reason other than the satisfaction that they have it.

I propose we as a race simply shake of this evil that has come upon us, we as a humans can destroy our self created survival pillar of money, and when that day comes, our race can truly evolve into real civilised peoples and not the delusion of such that we hold so dear now. The future is ripe for our taking, we just need to throw away the blindfold and chains, and acknowledge the destruction in our wake is our fault, and then we can move forward- together as one, together as one race unified by a common goal of peace, freedom and equality.
A Soavist message. For more information simply comment or note me. I am up for debate, but do make it unneedingly personal or offensive.
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mido557 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Favorited, favorited, a million times Favorited!
Excellent, well-composed, clean and concise. Also comes with a wonderful message that which most people do not realize.
The few points I was going to bring up were dealt with by :icondelusionalhamster:, so I don't need to go into it.

I have to say, after reading a bit of your work, I can safely tell you that you have an excellent mode of thinking, and I just hope there are more people out there like you.
(I do, however, seriously crash with Social-Communism working with foreign Capitalist nations, but that's a point for another day, haha.)

Great work!
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ShadowsOfAVorlon Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2014  Student Writer
Thank you greatly for the positive feedback. I haven't put most of my recent thoughts up here yet, but with people like yourselves dropping by I may start to again.
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mido557 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Please do!
Best stuff I've read on Deviantart so far! :D
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ShadowsOfAVorlon Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2014  Student Writer
Wow... thank you greatly. 
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delusionalHamster Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Nicely written, thought-provoking piece. Firstly, if it's cool with you I'd like to offer some constructive criticism on the flow of your text. Overall, you have a good structure, you have neatly divided your text in paragraphs, which is good - the text doesn't ramble, and is concise and to the point. You start by introducing your premise, listing your points and ending with the conclusion. This is all very good.

However, there are some parts that you could structure your text a bit better, as you have a bit of runaway sentences going at some places. For example, in the second paragraph you have a really long sentence divided only by commas, which gives a sort of ranty, out-of-breath feeling, and would work better if you would try to organize the sentence structure in a more natural way. Try reading the text out loud, and you'll probably see what I mean.

Fourth paragraph is the worst offender in this - it's literally a single sentence. Chopping it down in to more manageable units makes it easier for the reader to follow: you don't need to be so stingy with the periods, and you can even include the occasional ellipsis for emphasis... although don't overdo it, or it makes your text look faltering.

There's also some grammatical errors and typos, but I'm not going to start nitpicking on those. Life's too short, you know...

Now when it comes to the actual content - it's a very idealistic message, and I think it would be great to see a day when money would be totally unnecessary. Realistically speaking though, I don't think that it will ever be possible to get rid of currency until we attain the technological level that gets us to a post-scarcity society - in which money would simply be rendered irrelevant. Even then, it will probably be a battle that needs to be fought: We already have some non-scarce goods, and some people are already trying to create an artificial scarcity for them simply because they stand to gain some profits by doing so. You can see this clearly in digital media, such as e-books and music files - they could be easily duplicated infinitely with no cost, but since people can profit by preventing others from copying and sharing them, they are trying to define such behaviour as "illegal".
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ShadowsOfAVorlon Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Student Writer
I am exceedingly grateful for your many points of advice.
With references to the 2nd and 4th paragraphs I shall make the appropriate corrections, but let us proceed to undoubtedly the better part of your critism- the ideological parameters.
I concur entirely quite honestly.
The Soavist ideals set out here, are exactly that- ideals. Soavism agrees with the majority the the world is not ready for Communism, but disagrees as it dictates it shall. Marx himself stated Communism evolves from Capitalism, and so Soavism replies in agreement stating Communism will evolve out of the betterment of mankind.
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